Book Titles – Your Book’s First Hook?

Book Titles – Your Book’s First Hook?

Humans see in a hierarchical way

Which is to say that we take in information in a particular order. In terms of sight, the hierarchy is Movement»Outline»Detail. Our attention, like most sighted animals, is attracted to motion. Something moving toward us at speed is likely to be a threat or at least a danger. This is why predators often ‘stalk’ their prey, moving slowly to avoid detection.

Then we see the outline

This allows us to quickly estimate or even ascertain whether something is hostile; prey; vulnerable; damaged; sick and many other conditions that may factor into a decision to attack, retreat or hide – “Hey doesn’t that large thing look like the outline of a running bear? We should run.” This is why effective camouflage can simply break up the outline of an object, be it a tiger or a tank, rather than having to be a facsimile of the surroundings.

Finally we see details

“Ah yes, now I can see the saliva glistening off the jagged teeth lining its gaping maw. We should run faster, if possible.”

So? So what?

So far so, ‘that’s a different way to look at creating descriptions, but your protagonist there is a little matter-of-fact,’ but what has this got to do with titles?If I’m book shopping, the hierarchy goes: Outline»Cover»Title»Synopsis»Social Proof.

Because books don’t move, (unless they’re on a rotating display stand, and even then it’s the stand that’s moving,) we can skip immediately to the Outline of the object stage.

From the outline of an object

we infer a lot that consciously we don’t think about, but that informs our choices. If I go into a bookshop looking for a breezy holiday read, I’m unlikely to look at large, hard-backed tomes, partly because the tale of the journalist who sacrifices his career to become a lens grinder in Omsk doesn’t sound altogether breezy, but mainly because you can already tell from its outline that it would take up more space in your luggage and be heavier and more unwieldy than a paperback.

We look to the cover

for a variety of information: Possible genre; depictions of characters – whose attire may impart probable locations or historical settings; or else symbolism of some sort to give us a broad stroke of the book’s content.

We take in the cover before the title because although there is detail in the cover, pictorial representations don’t require the sort of cognitive load that written language does, as the latter requires recognition and decryption and so is saved for later in the process, because if we have time to take in more details, we must be safe.

All of which is by way of saying

I read a book title today that made me want to buy it immediately. It was: “The Clocks In This House All Tell Different Times” by Xan Brooks, (not an affiliate link, but to help promote Salt Publishing’s very worthy #justonebook campaign,) and after reading the synopsis, I did so – in part because Xan used the title as the first hook.

How do you hook readers in with a title?

It occurred to me that my interest was piqued by the title because it implied a question: Why? Why do the clocks in that house all tell different times? What possible reason could there be? That line of thought impelled me into reading the synopsis, where I found a premise I liked the sound of, then read “Praise for this book” and reviews included on the book’s information page that provided rather strong social proof of the book’s quality and likely levels of entertainment, and so satisfied, I made my purchase.

The best titles evoke questions

If your title already has me curious, you’ve won half the battle. You have my attention. All you have to do now is land the synopsis with an intriguing premise and if it’s not too far into the month and I’ve not already bought a ton of books, and if the price is right and the website UX is good and the checkout process is easy and has my favourite payment options and if I have time … I’ll probably buy the book. So maybe halfway was a stretch given the number of factors involved in purchasing decisions, but you know what I definitely won’t buy? Hundreds of other books that didn’t catch my attention.

What sorts of questions can I use?

Any really. I’ve not done any research into what sort of questions convert the best. If anyone has more info, I’d love to hear from you and with your consent, will add it to this post to spread the info love.

I have a feeling though that the most attractive titles may involve one simple question used as a hook, but that can spur other, more complicated and detail-oriented questions.


Yes, that’s certainly one of them. Just kidding. The major questions are, of course: Who, What, When, Where, Why and How. (‘Which?’ Has a special place in the heart of this writer, (and I suspect many others,) alongside bad reviews and the question, “So, what’s your book about?”) If your title makes me ask one of these, in isolation, you will get my attention. My first question when reading the title “The Clocks In This House All Tell Different Times” was: Why? Just that. One word. (Read back three paragraphs if you don’t believe me!) If your title’s implied question can be distilled down to just one of those words, the question is at it’s most succinct, which means it is processed quickly, which in turn means we raise it’s priority because we can decide if it is worthy of our attention quickly and time is a huge factor in decision making. We have evolved with short initial attention spans, in order to scan our environment and note possible prey or predators nearby. Anything that could be one or the other of those things we give further attention to. Anything that takes too long we dismiss unless we feel safe. We still operate at this level unconsciously, which you may have heard of referred to as our ‘Reptilian Brain’ – the primitive part of us that handles things like our fight or flight responses.

Most of the bookshops I’ve ever been in feel like very safe spaces for me, so anything that makes me curious, I will then spend more time asking questions and probing for answers, such as: “Why do the clocks in that house all tell different times?” Which is a reframing of the initial question looking for more detail, as per the hierarchical process, or: “What possible reason could there be for that?” Which again, is probing for details.

My favourite book titles often adhere to this principle:

  • Fight Club – What? What is that?
  • The Hitchhiker’s Guide To The Galaxy – What? What’s That? What galaxy? Where?
  • To Kill A Mockingbird – What? Is What? What happens?
  • The Name Of The Wind – What is it? Why is it important?
  • The Lord of the Rings – Who? What rings? Why?
  • Something Wicked This Way Comes – What? Why is it coming? What makes it wicked?

Some other titles may evoke more of a general, “Huh?” type of reaction initially, before questions are formed, (which is really just a more vague version of “What?”) but this is also acceptable as it means it caused a reaction, gained the reader’s interest and evoked further questions, e.g. Dune – Huh? What Dune? What’s that?

My title

My current work in progress is titled “The City Of Tears“, which I feel evokes “Why?” as its core question, plus “What city?”, “Where?”, “Who’s crying?” and “What’s causing people to cry?”

Test your title

Think about your current book’s title. Does it imply a question? If so, what is it? Can it be distilled to one of the basic questions? Does it evoke further questions? Let me know in the comments.

Intro to the world of Feld

Intro to the world of Feld

The novel I’m currently working on is a high/epic fantasy called The City Of Tears. Set in the magical, fantasy world of Feld, a planet somewhat like our own. There is one large, main continent on Feld, called Pangraal, which translates as “many blood”, due to the plethora of races living on it. There are also several islands off the coast of the supercontinent.


Current Fantasy Novel Progress 1

Current Fantasy Novel Progress 1

  • Novel Progress 12.5%

Novel Progress

Over the last couple of days I’ve been reasonably prolific with my novel progress, writing over 3,500 words and completely rewriting my second chapter, which is based around the Mage character of Heiron.

Chapter Synopsis

In the chapter, Heiron decides to take up the offer of a local guide to show him a shortcut through the forest. This will get him back to the city in less time than the more public route, be quieter, and the guide will show and explain interesting flora and fauna along the way.

Not being overly fond of crowds, and always looking to learn new things, Heiron agrees. However Heiron is not stupid. He is to become an Arbiter – a Mage that serves as a detective for crimes involving magic. His suspicions raised, he creates a tracker spell and attaches it to the guide who pitches the deal and takes Heiron’s money. The lad runs off toward a local inn, telling Heiron his guide will be with him shortly. At least if no guide shows up, Heiron can locate the lad and get his money back.

To his surprise, a guide does indeed turn up and they set off on the path cleared through the forest. As they travel, Heiron’s suspicions are raised again as they hike and the guide misnames a type of tree. On its own, that could just be a mistake, but the guide goes on to get a couple more facts wrong. Just before they enter a clearing, Heiron’s tracker spell pings him to let him know that the lad who ran off to the inn is now just up ahead.

The lad had mentioned that the guides worked in shifts – perhaps he was to take over for the next leg of the journey, but Heiron begins to think that something else might be going on …


Heiron is an interesting character to write. He’s a young human Mage, fresh out of college (which the chapter does touch on briefly,). He’s seen by his peers and in fact by most people, as a bit of an odd duck. He has an unusual way of seeing and thinking about things that many others struggle to relate to. Some readers may relate to that, I know I do.

His particular quirks have advantages though. It means he excelled at college due to razor-sharp focus and determination to succeed at his chosen field, to an almost fanatical degree. He made his mind up to become an arbiter, then did everything he could to realise that dream and once he gets back to the city, he will be starting his new role – the “culmination of seven years worth of work.”

The Invisible College

The chapter also introduces the Invisible College, the educational establishment for Mages, run by the Magister – the Guild of Mages that also operates as government, judiciary, policing force, civil service and various other roles that permeate the administration of the city. In the world of Feld, if you want to be a Mage, you study at the Invisible College. Why would you want to? Being a Mage gives you a stable and respected choice of careers, as well as other benefits, like housing on one of the upper tiers in the city.

What’s next for Heiron? Is he walking into an ambush?

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Writing Tips: Set An End Goal

Writing Tips: Set An End Goal

One of the biggest mistakes I ever made in my past writings was not to have an end goal in mind.

This has caused more unfinished manuscripts than anything else – for me and I suspect many other writers.

“But wait,” you say, “I don’t know the ending to my book! I want to discover it as I write!”

Well, me too for the most part, but having an end goal and having the ending of your story plotted out or outlined are two separate and completely different things.

Having an end goal means you have some idea of how long your story is going to be, in general terms. It can be a variable – I think of my book’s meta information as a living document, that can be updated at any time, and that contains guidelines rather than hard and fast rules.

The “Average” Fantasy Novel

So for example, I was reading something the other day that said that the “average fantasy novel” is approximately 100k words, divided into 40 chapters. You can contest this any number of ways. For a start, there are many fantasy novels that are way longer than 100k words. However, having a rough basis to start from means you start the project with an end goal in mind. Write 40 chapters, comprising about 100k words.

Previously I’ve been more of a ‘seat-of-my-pants’ writer, i.e. start writing, and keep writing until it’s done. With this novel, I am working much more to a structure that follows story structure rules. I’ve figured out my four acts, the structure modules they contain and the number of chapters per module. This is based on some good info and advice from some published authors.

This gives me not only and end goal, but also an idea of where I should be at any point in the story, AND what needs to happen next to progress the plot.

The attached diagram took me an hour or so using Scapple, but you could use pen and paper, or any mind mapping software.

How This Helps

Once I’d completed it to this stage, I could see an overview of the novel, as well as a rough timeline. The most important thing for me was that I could actually SEE an end to aim for. The next step for me is to write out short chapter descriptions, then a rough timeline. Timelines are not always linear in novels – look at Slaughterhouse 5 by Kurt Vonnegut for example – so having one could prove useful.
You could also include arcs alongside the timeline for each of your POV characters, graphs displaying tension over time through the novel or pacing – whatever will help you get the book finished.

Suddenly through doing this simple task, my novel became achievable. 40 chapters – that’s not that bad. Definitely do-able. Instead of being this seemingly endless task, breaking it up like this into smaller chunks, is recommended by psychologists and motivational speakers for any large task, means that there’s less pressure to write the whole thing. Just focus on the chapter in front of you.

Even if you get stuck, the structure should help you to figure out where the story needs to go next. If you’re really stuck you can always jump ahead and write a cool scene for a bit, safe in the knowledge that you know where it will go in the story and that you will be able to find your way back afterwards.

Definitely no more ‘Pantsing’ for me.